coffe cats

coffe cats
cats are not coffe

l4d 2

l4d 2
my favorite l4d 2 campaing ( i have l4d )

Bill

Bill
my favorite left 4 dead ( pc ) person

Tuesday, February 2, 2010

The amasing 5

Today i went around the school in the darkest hour touching the wood oh it was so smooth i had to feel it once more but this time it was wet so i picked up my had as fast as i chould. What i smelled was unbalivabel it was cold like a bad persons blood it was every where then when i got close to a room it smelled like cleaning supplies so i grabed them and clean the school up and after i did it smelled lemany freash. when i whent to this big shiny door when i touched it i heard kids playing shouting having fun when i looked inside there was grade 9's in there when i looked harder i saw my sister when i looked she got hit in the back of the head with a soft green round fluffy ball. when i whent to a lowwer part of the school there was vending machines i bought one when i ate it it tasted like heaven it was all fluffy and chewy so i knew the school tasted like it tasted like heaven. and when i when around the school i saw it all it was amasing. today is wensday during lunch they had pizza i figuerd it had to be chewy and soft i bought one and it was soft and chewy and messy. but it felft soft and warm so i knew the schools heart was soft and warm. well it is 3:15 and i must go now for my parents and my brother miss me dont worry my soft and warm school i will be back soon.

5 comments:

  1. Good story. I like how you were so descriptive and it was very intreaging.
    I think you need to watch out for punctuation; such as when you start a sentance you need to capitalize the first letter. Also, watch out for spelling mistakes; such as unbelievable
    PS: Great title!

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  2. I think you need more deadale and pashon.

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  3. A whole bunch of ideas, this is good. You do need to make more sense by adding a couple of details and editing.

    For example,when you said "Today i went around the school in the darkest hour touching the wood oh it was so smooth i had to feel it once more but this time it was wet so i picked up my had as fast as i chould" I became confused. Where were you going, why was the wood wet? Where was this..

    Keep at it.

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  4. uhhh i know just dont type it jess it is just a rough draft

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